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Comment 2 of 2, added on May 23rd, 2005 at 2:09 PM.
As a down to earth Scot who likes to express herself inbasic language from time to time, I 'rejoice' in this poem. I like the humour, 'baboon shit (that leopards induce)', remora shit slightly in
advance of the shark shit and 'gopher shit (or broke)'. The alliteration is also attractive and accurate,'tiny scribbled little shrew shit'. I also like the questions it raises; why is hornet shit so difficult to assess, tiger shit too acid
to contemplate and wallaby shit so other wordly? However, I feel that in an attempt to impress, the language is completely over the top places, eg camel shit that slaps the ghastly dry siliceous and wolf shit upon the germicidal ice. Either the poem is humourous or it is lofty. I think the poet has weakened the poem by trying to make it too many things to all people.
Caroline from United Kingdom
Comment 1 of 2, added on January 3rd, 2005 at 9:46 PM.
shit! ive never seen the word shit that many times in a poem!
ruth
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As a down to earth Scot who likes to express herself inbasic language from time to time, I 'rejoice' in this poem. I like the humour, 'baboon shit (that leopards induce)', remora shit slightly in
advance of the shark shit and 'gopher shit (or broke)'. The alliteration is also attractive and accurate,'tiny scribbled little shrew shit'. I also like the questions it raises; why is hornet shit so difficult to assess, tiger shit too acid
to contemplate and wallaby shit so other wordly? However, I feel that in an attempt to impress, the language is completely over the top places, eg camel shit that slaps the ghastly dry siliceous and wolf shit upon the germicidal ice. Either the poem is humourous or it is lofty. I think the poet has weakened the poem by trying to make it too many things to all people.
Caroline from United Kingdom